Bath Salts
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Thanks for your thoughts guys, this is just a silly thing, I could have posted it in fun but I think it could be better.

I agree that the ending is weak, I like the double draw a bath thing though, and that rhyme restricts my options a bit. I'll think on it...
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Bath Salts - by Wjames - 08-11-2017, 08:31 AM
RE: Bath Salts - by dukealien - 08-11-2017, 12:09 PM
RE: Bath Salts - by alonso ramoran - 08-12-2017, 01:39 PM
RE: Bath Salts - by Achebe - 08-13-2017, 03:30 AM
RE: Bath Salts - by Wjames - 08-18-2017, 08:26 AM
RE: Bath Salts - by The Four-Eyed Cat - 08-19-2017, 03:49 AM
RE: Bath Salts - by lauraelizdok - 02-19-2018, 09:03 PM



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