08-21-2017, 07:15 PM
i'm struggling with this one richard. on the one hand i like it a lot. i get it...
on the other hand it screams at me to ask for more.
the body-bag metaphor worked well as did the worrying. i found nothing wrong with the lines you have, i'd just like more, possibly before the last stanza.
on the other hand it screams at me to ask for more.
the body-bag metaphor worked well as did the worrying. i found nothing wrong with the lines you have, i'd just like more, possibly before the last stanza.