First Edit: Parenthood

[Tiger the Lion]

Hey Richard. I like this. A couple thoughts below...

Parenthood

My worry for you surrounds me like a body bag.

I struggle,
desperate to find an opening
or even a corner,
but the blackness refuses to relent.

Then I wonder, I must have written this same line in a dozen poems. I am trying desperately to get away from it. To me it feels like a utility line that is only there to transition into the punchline. This is not about me, haha- Just explaining why it jumps out out me as a weak line in an otherwise tight piece. I would be inclined to strike it and start the next line with "Or".
is my worry actually a cloak
that protects me from a dark desire
to lie still and play dead? thought provoking finish. 

My other thought is you use a few phrases that border on cliche. I think you get away with it, but only just...
"find an opening"
"dark desire"
even "lie still and play dead" - (though you need this one)

Thanks for the read Richard.