09-01-2017, 05:40 AM
To me, the more mysterious a poem the better it is. Therefore, I think it would be better if you didn't state "my depression, my anxiety,
my PTSD, and my issues" because it's a bit cliche. You could at it in the end, or remove it altogether. Other than that, I really like the metaphor and emotions in this poem.
Good Luck!
my PTSD, and my issues" because it's a bit cliche. You could at it in the end, or remove it altogether. Other than that, I really like the metaphor and emotions in this poem.
Good Luck!