A conker for the nature table
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(09-22-2017, 11:17 PM)Keith Wrote:  I picked you from the curb, - using you instead of it is powerful
prickled and sour sapped,
your fall, split white
on chestnut brown.- Perfect image of a squashed conker!

The ground drowns
in a crinkled collapse - not sure if you need "a"?
as feet shuffle sound
through wind cornered clusters - maybe put a hyphen between wind and cornered

Rain needles,
sharp as sketch book pencils. - love this image.
empty out,
run for cover high streets. - bit confused by punctuation here!

Blotted damp under a railway arch.
I pull my hood up and hide away,
bone deep,
on this top button day. - brilliant
I recently went for a walk with a friend and we each picked up a conker from the ground. It made me think of conker-fights in the playground and yes, conkers for the nature table. Then I see your lovely poem, so thanks for this.
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A conker for the nature table - by Keith - 09-22-2017, 11:17 PM
RE: A conker for the nature table - by Wastrel - 09-24-2017, 02:33 AM
RE: A conker for the nature table - by Keith - 09-27-2017, 01:50 AM
RE: A conker for the nature table - by billy - 09-25-2017, 05:23 PM
RE: A conker for the nature table - by billy - 09-27-2017, 04:12 PM
RE: A conker for the nature table - by nibbed - 09-28-2017, 04:47 AM
RE: A conker for the nature table - by Wastrel - 09-28-2017, 06:21 AM
RE: A conker for the nature table - by Keith - 09-29-2017, 03:28 AM
RE: A conker for the nature table - by Richard - 09-29-2017, 11:44 AM
RE: A conker for the nature table - by vagabond - 09-30-2017, 04:21 AM



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