A conker for the nature table

[Keith]

I picked you from the curb, - using you instead of it is powerful
prickled and sour sapped,
your fall, split white
on chestnut brown.- Perfect image of a squashed conker!

The ground drowns
in a crinkled collapse - not sure if you need "a"?
as feet shuffle sound
through wind cornered clusters - maybe put a hyphen between wind and cornered

Rain needles,
sharp as sketch book pencils. - love this image.
empty out,
run for cover high streets. - bit confused by punctuation here!

Blotted damp under a railway arch.
I pull my hood up and hide away,
bone deep,
on this top button day. - brilliant

I recently went for a walk with a friend and we each picked up a conker from the ground. It made me think of conker-fights in the playground and yes, conkers for the nature table. Then I see your lovely poem, so thanks for this.

Hi Wastrel
Glad you could connect with this one, thank you for the feedback, I used it in the edit. Best Keith

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hard to fault this one keith. some good solid imagery  okay after three or four reads i found a couple of minuscule prob's. the post stands well enough as is but i think you could polish it just a little bit more. great read.

I picked you from the curb, i'm trying hard to find fault so this is it, the line feels too pat, too easy, how did yo pick it?
prickled and sour sapped, a suggestion would be to use this as the first line, good S's
your fall, split white
on chestnut brown.

The ground drowns
in a crinkled collapse
as feet shuffle sound
through wind-cornered clusters. excellent extended image; nigh on bloody perfect.

Rain needles,
sharp as sketch book pencils. you're imagery again is excellent
empty out,
run for cover high streets. i get you're telling the high streets to run for cover but i'm not sure others will, if i'm wrong, then you need some punctuation

Blotted damp under a railway arch.
I pull my hood up and hide away,
bone deep,
on this top button day. not keen with the rhyme, maybe lose the "away" the rhyme feels a little forced.

Hi Billy
You made some solid comments here I think I agreed with nearly everything said and used most in the edit, appreciated the feedback, thanks for the help. Keith