A conker for the nature table

[billy]

hi Kieth, solid edit,

Edit 1
Prickled and sour sapped much stronger opening
I found you by the roadside,
your fall, split white
on chestnut brown.

The ground drowns
in a crinkled collapse
as feet shuffle sound
through wind-cornered clusters.

Rain needles,
sharp as sketch book pencils,
scurry shoppers along,
run for cover, high streets. i know i said use a comma but i was wrong another suggestion [and i'm sorry for this] high streets, run for cover

Blotted damp under a railway arch
I pull my hood up and shudder, works better.
bone deep,
on this top button day.


Original
I picked you from the curb,
prickled and sour sapped,
your fall, split white
on chestnut brown.

The ground drowns
in a crinkled collapse
as feet shuffle sound
through wind-cornered clusters.

Rain needles,
sharp as sketch book pencils.
empty out,
run for cover high streets.

Blotted damp under a railway arch.
I pull my hood up and hide away,
bone deep,
on this top button day.