10-07-2017, 03:44 AM 
	
	
	
		@Todd, nice job, some powerful lines, I like the closing in tunnel sequence and the silent dinner. perhaps "just before the magician" rather than "and then"  just a thought I know these are only rough drafts but this is already very good. Best Keith
	
	
	
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