Standing
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First of all great poem. The lack of flowery descriptions does a nice job conveying the speakers feeling of loneliness and confusion. The poems begins very abstractly and end with more concrete imagery. Maybe try adding some of the concrete imagery to the beginning too. That said, I like how you mention objects without giving them long descriptions.
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Standing - by Youi - 10-04-2017, 01:05 PM
RE: Standing - by abstractconstriction - 10-04-2017, 01:34 PM
RE: Standing - by Youi - 10-04-2017, 10:50 PM
RE: Standing - by ClaireLou - 10-04-2017, 11:25 PM
RE: Standing - by Richard - 10-06-2017, 12:09 PM
RE: Standing - by Linda - 10-10-2017, 05:04 AM
RE: Standing - by Caine - 10-10-2017, 08:37 AM
RE: Standing - by UlrickMasters - 10-13-2017, 09:20 AM
RE: Standing - by rose - 10-14-2017, 05:12 AM



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