11-01-2017, 05:44 AM
You've concealed
my heart inside a music box
you'll only open
once I've chimed a final vox.
In there, you'll find it's changed
and left behind a note:
"I'll never sing for you again,
or play a single note."
Hi, youi!
I like the rhythm of this poem and the form.
But is the box the one who left the note?
Could the box not handle the heart?
I would like to see only one note in this poem.
It certainly is making me think about things!
nibbed
my heart inside a music box
you'll only open
once I've chimed a final vox.
In there, you'll find it's changed
and left behind a note:
"I'll never sing for you again,
or play a single note."
Hi, youi!
I like the rhythm of this poem and the form.
But is the box the one who left the note?
Could the box not handle the heart?
I would like to see only one note in this poem.
It certainly is making me think about things!
nibbed
there's always a better reason to love