Edit 3: Chiaroscuro

[alonso ramoran]

Chiaroscuro 

At night,
   store lights send you over 
   their ancient cobbled roads ... the cobbled roads don't belong to the store lights, I'd think
   with bars resounding music. ....a comma after roads and no 'with' would work here. 'With' is almost always a very loose conjunction
   Strolling on, I smile as you dance 
   beneath our passing bodies.  .... this is well done. I can see exactly what you're describing. The last two lines can be a short poem (in that format, the 'strolling on' would be superfluous, however)

Hi alex - this is a nice one. It would have been better with a second layer of meaning, but sometimes a poem can be perfectly fine as a word picture, which this one is.

Hi Achebe,

Thank you for your thoughts! I agree with pretty much all you're suggesting. There is something I'm wondering about this poem that I'll tag in a spoiler.

I was personifying this show of light and shadows as a love interest, which reveals itself by the end to be just a light-show-typa-thing, and in doing so it gives the audience a glimpse into how temporary the relationship was between the speaker and love interest with the use of "passing bodies". Would cutting out the first sentence do this a favor? I'm currently mulling over the idea, which by the way, was a great suggestion. Does this come across or does the title give it away?

And nibbed, thank you for your kind words. "Bars" wasn't really intended as a double entendre but I'd love to hear your interpretation!