11-20-2017, 04:03 PM
Hi nibbed - to expand on what I wrote earlier - the title is smart. It “draws you in” as Rich’s d above said.
But after that, you need to show how god does things, not just talk about what he does. It’s the same showing / telling issue that we keep harping on about. For instance, “he deadened pain” is just boring prose. Tell us how he did it - not in hundreds of words, but in a line or two, recount an episode succinctly.
Similarly, avoid cliches like “crumbing heart”
But after that, you need to show how god does things, not just talk about what he does. It’s the same showing / telling issue that we keep harping on about. For instance, “he deadened pain” is just boring prose. Tell us how he did it - not in hundreds of words, but in a line or two, recount an episode succinctly.
Similarly, avoid cliches like “crumbing heart”
~ I think I just quoted myself - Achebe