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Third Edit: strange goodbye/long goodbye

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12-03-2017, 04:59 AM

Hey all,
This one has been on my mind the last few days, and I decided to strip it down a bit. I know this edit doesn't address every comment, but I'm pretty sure there will be another edit after this one at some point. Feel free to let me know if this version works any better.

Thanks in advance,
Richard

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Third Edit: strange goodbye/long goodbye - by Richard - 11-27-2017, 12:49 PM

RE: strange goodbye - by Todd - 11-27-2017, 01:52 PM

RE: strange goodbye - by Richard - 11-27-2017, 02:36 PM

RE: strange goodbye - by Achebe - 11-27-2017, 03:46 PM

RE: First Edit: strange goodbye - by Richard - 11-27-2017, 10:16 PM

RE: First Edit: strange goodbye - by Knot - 11-27-2017, 10:45 PM

RE: First Edit: strange goodbye - by nibbed - 11-28-2017, 07:39 AM

RE: First Edit: strange goodbye - by Richard - 11-28-2017, 11:48 AM

RE: Second Edit: strange goodbye/long goodbye - by Richard - 11-30-2017, 12:42 PM

RE: Second Edit: strange goodbye/long goodbye - by Knot - 12-01-2017, 02:25 AM

RE: Second Edit: strange goodbye/long goodbye - by vagabond - 12-01-2017, 02:55 AM

RE: Second Edit: strange goodbye/long goodbye - by Richard - 12-01-2017, 11:53 AM

RE: Third Edit: strange goodbye/long goodbye - by Richard - 12-03-2017, 04:59 AM

RE: Third Edit: strange goodbye/long goodbye - by Knot - 12-04-2017, 01:03 AM

RE: Third Edit: strange goodbye/long goodbye - by Richard - 12-11-2017, 01:48 PM

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