12-19-2017, 02:17 AM
"He deadened my pain
by painting a smile, keeping
this heart from fainting." When I red this I said to my self start reading from the begining again, more carefully. The catchy title makes the reader curious, and then he's left to fill the void his/hers thoughts, in my opinion. I like poems with abstractions and metaphors as well but not to omit the point.
"He met
lies with lies,
deceit with deceit;" You let me think what ever I want, but don't know what you want/feel. If that's what you intented, very well done.
"It's harder to pick bones
with God," Are annoying circumstances difficult to be dealt with spiritually ?
Your writting is poetic, in my opinion, but why there is such a line morphology, I don't know.
by painting a smile, keeping
this heart from fainting." When I red this I said to my self start reading from the begining again, more carefully. The catchy title makes the reader curious, and then he's left to fill the void his/hers thoughts, in my opinion. I like poems with abstractions and metaphors as well but not to omit the point.
"He met
lies with lies,
deceit with deceit;" You let me think what ever I want, but don't know what you want/feel. If that's what you intented, very well done.
"It's harder to pick bones
with God," Are annoying circumstances difficult to be dealt with spiritually ?
Your writting is poetic, in my opinion, but why there is such a line morphology, I don't know.