Edit 5: Homecoming

Edit 5: Homecoming

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#14

01-26-2018, 09:20 AM

Hi Knot,

You're right about "squelch". The meaning of the word is precisely what I wanted, but I was iffy about the sonics of it too esp. coming after horse hooves. I'll settle for kisses for now, until I can think of something better.

I see what you're saying about the 3 lines a verse now and I'll see what I can do. I'm going to change some stuff on this fifth edit, but I don't think it will be the edit I'm settling for.

Best, Alex

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Edit 5: Homecoming - by alonso ramoran - 12-27-2017, 02:45 AM

RE: The Foreign Prince - by Richard - 12-28-2017, 04:18 AM

RE: Always Welcomed - by vagabond - 12-28-2017, 10:10 PM

RE: Always Welcomed - by alonso ramoran - 12-29-2017, 02:39 AM

RE: Edit 1: Always Welcome - by Richard - 12-29-2017, 01:30 PM

RE: Edit 1: A Hearth Kept Warm - by alonso ramoran - 01-01-2018, 12:09 AM

RE: Edit 1: A Hearth Kept Warm - by Knot - 01-01-2018, 02:52 AM

RE: Edit 2: Homecoming - by alonso ramoran - 01-01-2018, 10:14 AM

RE: Edit 2: Homecoming - by Knot - 01-01-2018, 10:51 PM

RE: Edit 3: Homecoming - by alonso ramoran - 01-02-2018, 01:19 PM

RE: Edit 4: Homecoming - by Knot - 01-13-2018, 10:59 PM

RE: Edit 4: Homecoming - by alonso ramoran - 01-26-2018, 02:21 AM

RE: Edit 4: Homecoming - by Knot - 01-26-2018, 03:12 AM

RE: Edit 5: Homecoming - by alonso ramoran - 01-26-2018, 09:20 AM

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