Manic Episode In The Middle Of Winter

[Knot]

Enjoyed the read, WG
and am largely in agreement with Todd.
Think of a car crash... makes a much more engaging
opening than 'Maybe...' and the order 1, 3, 2 offers a
stronger ending. (Though the first line of 2 seems to be
part of 3).

If it wasn't for 'winter' in the title, I'd never know
that's where you're setting it.

You use 'goddess' twice, perhaps find an alternative to the second?
Similarly, 'vibrance' doesn't seem too dissimilar to 'hummingbird'
and there might be a better alternative.
I'd also suggest making those lines a bit punchier/shorter, perhaps
cut out 'in place of' ?
(I don't think you need 'or' in 1/L2)

Part Three might benefit from a little editing
(lines 3-5 either don't add much or are repeating
ideas from part 1, for example) and it is lacking
rhythmically.
Just a suggestion;
I walk 40 blocks at night,
smile in the dark.
I am a goddess, I think,
don’t sleep,
paint ugly things.

I write and write and write
and write and write and write
and write.
I skip classes.
I forget to dream.

...


Best, Knot.