The Lonely Among Us

[Richard]

Hey homer1950,
I like your sentiment here. I just think you need to play around with the wording in spots. I'll go into more detail below:

The lonely heart is unseen, -Although I'm not 100% sure if it's a cliche, I feel like the phrase "lonely heart" is a bit unoriginal. Plus, you use the words "alone" and empty" in the same stanza, which seems to me a bit redundant.
a dancer alone-
spinning on an empty floor -I would suggest rewording this stanza to read something like:
They are unseen,
dancers who spin
on empty floors.

no partner to tango 
with anymore -I don't mind this line for its content. However, the rhyme with "floor" bothers me. I just find that short lines that rhyme make me think of lighthearted poetry, whereas this is a serious poem.

Feelings hiding in shadows -The idea of "feelings" is a bit vague. Why not be more specific? Sadness? Depression?
while faked smiles wrinkle 
mournful cheeks -I would suggest trimming this stanza to something like:
Faked smiles hide in shadows,
mournful cheeks

empty wine bottles
strewn on a cold floor -Is the repetition of "floor" intentional?
aside bare feet -I like the imagery here. It supports the idea of loneliness well.

Melancholy poetry read
by a dim light-
tears dripping on somber lines -Personally, I don't feel like this stanza adds much. Not every lonely person reads poetry, but they have probably felt like they were dancing alone at one point in their lives. I hope that comment makes sense. I feel like if you want to keep this stanza, you should reconsider focusing on melancholy music instead of poetry, so to have wider appeal. Maybe even reference a specific sad song.

the note to end it all
thought of -
a thousand times... -I quite like this ending. My only suggestion would be to make it its own sentence.

I hope I wasn't overly negative here, but I feel like you have a good start.

Thanks for the read,
Richard