A Good Fall

[allisonkreid]

Falling in love was good
suprisingly
loving the fall was better

Knowing now
what I didn't then
was that she turned out to be half man
beneath the equator
and so my fall prevented
a confrontation
with that one-eyed stranger

Love the laconic nature of this. A few suggestions to tighten it up further:

Knowing now
what I didn't then,
she was he below
the equator

I am also getting hung up on the fall preventing confrontation. You are getting hung up in a circular argument that the fall would have been a posteriori and not a priori, and therefore not preventative. I get the clever play on words with beneath and fall... But the wording is already so pithy that you have written yourself into a nonsensical corner that may be difficult to near impossible to back out of.

Hope the feedback is helpful. Thanks for sharing!