06-29-2018, 01:26 PM
(06-24-2018, 11:41 AM)nozaki Wrote: I know the crit is harsh, but take what you will. i think you could narrow the theme of this poem much more or at least focus in; loneliness is an old topic. look forward to seeing what you do with it.One quick thing nozaki, I am older and have thick skin so harsh criticism is no biggie for me. However seeing you are fairly new here please be careful not to use harsh criticism in a forum geared for moderate critiques. Each forum has different guidelines. Again while it bothers me not, some newer writers are looking for basic feedback to get their feet wet as it where.
Thanks, Homer
Someday the Mystery will be known 