10-11-2018, 06:18 PM
I Really enjoyed this WJ, not sure if the end is a DIY nightmare or the N has just bashed someones brains in, but I assume that was where you wanted to take the reader, into ambiguity. The comparison of care home for the garage contents is fresh and one I could instantly connect with. My only point would be with S1, L3 & L4 seem to check out early in a list, I would like to see a middle stanza but not to telegraph the ending just to expand the initial Idea. No line by line from me, what you have written stands up well. Best Keith
If your undies fer you've been smoking through em, don't peg em out