07-05-2019, 04:02 AM 
	
	
	
		Thanks for coming back Knot, I like your version.  I also agree the title should be different. 
I have been trying to write in a more immediate style, not formal, and not polished,
so that it is conversational, often repeititive and not condensed. It may work better that way if recited.
	
	
	
I have been trying to write in a more immediate style, not formal, and not polished,
so that it is conversational, often repeititive and not condensed. It may work better that way if recited.

 

 
