07-10-2019, 10:33 PM 
	
	
	
		Thanks for the comments billy.  I appreciate seeing it from your POV.  You’ve pointed out the areas of ambiguity which are often difficult for the writer to see.
The words in bold were to indicate where I revised from the previous revision. They are not a part of the poem lol.
	
	
The words in bold were to indicate where I revised from the previous revision. They are not a part of the poem lol.
There is no escape from metre; there is only mastery. TS Eliot
	

 

 
