01-06-2020, 07:58 PM 
	
	
	(01-06-2020, 05:19 PM)Wjames Wrote: Thank you everyone, I've followed Tiger's suggestion about the tense, and bb's suggestiong regarding the title - it needed more clarity.Good title, it fits the piece and tells the story. Nice piece.
Hopefully it better now, would be happy if anyone wants to share any further thoughts.

 

 
