Untitled 1 (just some of my writing from my freshman year of high school)
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Untitled 1 (just some of my writing from my freshman year of high school)
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08-09-2020, 08:38 PM
I agree with both busker and rowen. I do really enjoy a few phrases/images, particularly “nothing inside of everything,” the glass breaking on the clock, “the echos do not sound.” Perhaps you could rewrite the poem in a way that recenters it around vacancy, both in tone and content—nothing inside of everything. Keep up the good work.
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Untitled 1 (just some of my writing from my freshman year of high school) - by Youngpoetdreams - 08-08-2020, 11:19 AM
RE: Untitled 1 (just some of my writing from my freshman year of high school) - by rowens - 08-09-2020, 08:05 AM
RE: Untitled 1 (just some of my writing from my freshman year of high school) - by Youngpoetdreams - 08-09-2020, 04:01 PM
RE: Untitled 1 (just some of my writing from my freshman year of high school) - by busker - 08-09-2020, 05:02 PM
RE: Untitled 1 (just some of my writing from my freshman year of high school) - by Youngpoetdreams - 08-09-2020, 05:10 PM
RE: Untitled 1 (just some of my writing from my freshman year of high school) - by busker - 08-09-2020, 06:50 PM
RE: Untitled 1 (just some of my writing from my freshman year of high school) - by Joyful Noise - 08-09-2020, 08:38 PM
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