12-02-2020, 11:06 PM
Hello there,
A simple poem - poor in love and money, but how do they relate?
The capitalisation of the puns is distracting and over-stresses the point,
along with that forced sounding middle line.
Work on a final line or couplet that connects the two states, for a more circular and complete resolution.
Thanks for sharing...........P
A simple poem - poor in love and money, but how do they relate?
The capitalisation of the puns is distracting and over-stresses the point,
along with that forced sounding middle line.
Work on a final line or couplet that connects the two states, for a more circular and complete resolution.
Thanks for sharing...........P