05-10-2021, 02:16 PM
TqB,
As this is basic, I'll just ditto knot. Overall I find it stilted, lacking in the necessary rhythm to sustain the reader through something this long. I did like these two lines:
"I didn’t need an angel with a fiery sword
to know that Garden was closed forever."
Great lines.
Best,
dale
As this is basic, I'll just ditto knot. Overall I find it stilted, lacking in the necessary rhythm to sustain the reader through something this long. I did like these two lines:
"I didn’t need an angel with a fiery sword
to know that Garden was closed forever."
Great lines.
Best,
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.