05-17-2021, 08:50 PM
C, enjoyed reading this. I was confused by the change in speakers after stanza 5 (?) and I think it would be good to split it into two sections. Since it's a long poem, that also gives readers a chance to pause and take a breath..
I really liked the first section the most; the speaker and his numbers/patterns obsessions. Second section not so much, but that may be more the subject matter than anything else. Getting old is not a subject I enjoy reading about. I'm living it.
I really liked the first section the most; the speaker and his numbers/patterns obsessions. Second section not so much, but that may be more the subject matter than anything else. Getting old is not a subject I enjoy reading about. I'm living it.