09-20-2021, 09:55 PM
Thanks for the suggestion. I think I'll have it moved now that you mention it but I first thought that since this was a more experimental poem with its own particular rules that it would be harder to critique and would therefore discourage people from critiquing. I'm still worried that'll happen but it is a poem that I enjoy editing at the moment while also being pretty tough to edit so I would really appreciate any detailed feedback I can get.
I'm a slow learner and I think I also learn better by doing things. I just started learning about dialectical materialism last year and don't really have a firm grasp on it yet, so I would consider writing this poem as another small learning exercise.
I attempted to rewrite it so that the reader could read around the edges but also could still read from one side of the shape to the other but I might have underestimated how difficult it is to do while still retaining a cohesive poem. I might have to set that idea to the side for now unless others respond with different suggestions on how I might accomplish this.
I'm a slow learner and I think I also learn better by doing things. I just started learning about dialectical materialism last year and don't really have a firm grasp on it yet, so I would consider writing this poem as another small learning exercise.
I attempted to rewrite it so that the reader could read around the edges but also could still read from one side of the shape to the other but I might have underestimated how difficult it is to do while still retaining a cohesive poem. I might have to set that idea to the side for now unless others respond with different suggestions on how I might accomplish this.