draft 4: self-similar

[alonso ramoran]

Mark,



Thank you for the feedback. Just going to try to clarify a few things below if I may

                     another, where wayward                  villeins                  toil, muzzled, skeletal "villains" "villeins" is intentional





             independent                          struggle                            onto                          smoothly  dependent? I'm curious about why you'd think so





                                     miles of fluorescent          light           and towering shelves, sounds like Home Depot could be haha

Again thank you very much for the feedback. A mushroom cloud is a visual interpretation that I think is relevant and thus welcome, but it is not what I set out to convey; I was kind of hoping the title would hint at that shape I was getting at a little.



You're feedback wasn't harsh at all. I thought you were pretty honest about what you thought worked and what didn't in a way that wasn't discouraging, and that's something I really appreciate



Best,

Alex