Loving Friday - edit, title change
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Loving Friday


It’s a perfect Friday
a perfectly ordinary Friday
as if any Friday could be
ordinary

when there’s time for everything
but no time to finish
anything

work is easy
toss it on the stack
for Monday

your silent breathless motionless
nervous afternoon anticipation
makes it impossible
to start on anything
at all

oh, Friday
if there were one day to love
it would be you
but there’s just no time
to resume that romance
now.




Thanks to all critics. 
Left the ending a little light and bittersweet... Fridays are kind of a love-em-and-leave-em, not so?  Hope V4 is now suitably suffocating, if nothing else.  And I tried "stick it on the stack" in v3 which certainly piles it on, but had to go with "toss" - same consonants but careless rather than energetic.
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Loving Friday - edit, title change - by dukealien - 12-06-2021, 10:45 AM
RE: Love Friday - by Tiger the Lion - 12-07-2021, 11:25 AM
RE: Love Friday - by Erthona - 12-08-2021, 09:50 AM
RE: Love Friday - by Mark A Becker - 12-09-2021, 03:32 AM
RE: Loving Friday - edit, title change - by dukealien - 12-10-2021, 11:30 AM
RE: Loving Friday - edit, title change - by Knot - 12-12-2021, 02:34 AM



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