Loving Friday - edit, title change

[Knot]

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Hi Duke,
liking the revision (not loving the title).

Passing thoughts ...

Loving Friday ................................................ any way to avoid 'Friday' in the title. Four, at the start, is surely overdoing it.


It’s a perfect Friday
a perfectly ordinary Friday
as if any Friday could be
ordinary

when there’s time for everything
but no time
to finish anything

when your silent breathless motionless ............ I think 'nervous' covers this (though 'suffocating' might work even better?)
nervous afternoon anticipation
makes it impossible ..................................... 'is making it'?
to start
on anything at all

oh, Friday ................................................... 'Sweet Friday' ?
if there were one day to love ...................... prefer the original 'a day'
it would be you
but there’s just no time .............................. this and the next line are the only ones that don't read/flow as well as the rest. To me, anyway. (Wondered about adding 'surely it would be you / but there's ... )
to resume that romance
now

toss it on the stack
for Monday



Best, Knot


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