Storied Lines(prev untitled) edit

[brynmawr1]

Driving home from hockey I see
black, crisscrossed scars on white concrete,
arranged at unnatural angles
revealing the geometry of intersected lives.
 
The tire squeals echo in the ether,
no longer heard by the living, 
still felt in my gut.

Was metal, bone rent and broken?
Futures shattered with the windshield,
a mosaic of infinite shimmering shards,
suspended in stopped time, lives inflected.
 
Or was the violence only of words?
Curses made at each other, fate;
an anger of inconvenience,
only promises broken.
 
Black lines on the road
have their secrets,
leaving me to wonder.

In mild critique and looking only at the first revision, I have only a few suggestions.

First, you nicely avoid "the" except at the beginning of your second stanza.  It's not bad there - you are referring to specific skid marks.  But might it not be better to remove it entirely (breaking suddenly into speculation) or perhaps replace it with "Their" to tie them to the marks?

Similarly, "the" at the end of your first stanza might be changed to "a" or something descriptive - "stark," for example.  ("[T]he ether" is fine, there's only one.)

After your explanation I can understand "promises broken," but without that context it's a bit problematic.  I'd put "conventions" rather than "promises" (right of way, obeying signals and other limits).  In the same stanza, "made" (in "Curses made") could be a bit more descriptive and active - "breathed" or "growled," but better?

And the last stanza, if this is not too far for moderate, needs a little more punch.  "[H]ave" for example, could be "hold" or even "flaunt;" alternatively (and please pardon the rewrite) the whole second line could be removed and the last changed leaving something like, "Black lines on my road/leave me to wonder."

It's a good concept, and already quite strong.  The above are suggestions only.

Duke,
thank you for all of your suggestions.  The "promises broken" line was originally going to be "plans made the only thing broken" which now I think works better but it seemed too wordy at the time.  The last stanza has been a bit of a sticky wicket.  I really like the "wonder" ending but there is "punch" in ending with "The lines keep their secrets" leaving the reader to do the wondering.  I feel like both work for different reasons.  Regarding the depth of your critique, don't be shy.  I only put it in this forum because I'm not sure the poem itself is worthy of other forums.  I guess my skill as a writer is also a limiting factor!  I will make edits.  Please provide further suggestions.
I greatly appreciate your time and insights,
bryn