03-02-2023, 07:41 AM
(03-02-2023, 07:12 AM)Mark A Becker Wrote:Ugh, so many rules. I would like to remind that it did start as a haiku, only wind, until I changed the title and the rest is history.(03-02-2023, 05:14 AM)brynmawr1 Wrote: ... gnashing is fun.Also note that this 5-7-5 poem is a senryu (about people), and senryu is often confused with haiku (about nature). Yours actually incorporates a bit of both by using the mind/wind metaphor to compare the wind (nature) with what's going on in your mind (people).
Thanks for your input. Fun exercise!
I think the gnashing proved to be worth it.
You wound up with a good one,
Mark
Thanks again,
steve


