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a long time considering can be
a longer time, much longer
than shoulder blades

thin hills, for when I see them,
American streets spread wider
and wider, like yawns and aches—

we have been lying here
for years now, on occasion
we hold hands, sing psalms

however, when winter comes,
we adjust our sleep patterns,
for winter winds are fiercest

Hi 71,

Some reader notes:

I don't quite get how the title relates to the poem.

I like the two parts to the poem, the initial two stanzas and ending two stanzas, but a bit confused by the switch from "I" to "we".  I'd expect the "we" to include "I", but that part throws me a curve I can't quite catch.

It also seems to end in mid-poem.  I guess I was expecting more of a conclusion, a bringing together of the two parts (as I read it).

Hope this is some help.  No suggestions about the lines themselves.  They are clear and precise.

TqB

________________________________________________ a later thought

I think "American streets" is too general.  Unless you are taking on some big subject, something that does effect America in its entirety.  I'm readig it not as an allegory, but as about actual streets, so I may have (often do) missed the point.