Getting ready for the show

[brynmawr1]

Peonies rising
upon green stems, slow-motion
fireworks bursting white.

I'd suggest a different title.  This poem is like one of those stop-motion films.  If there was a way to format it differently to maximize that:

Peonies rise
upon green stems
slow-motion
fireworks
bursting white.

Something like that.  Or spread out the lines more.

Anyways, enjoyed studying it.

Hello again.  Well, it's supposed to be a haiku and I've been told they don't usually have titles so I just put in something.  I could do a form poem with the lines rising from left to right like fireworks.  I redid the middle line.
bryn