05-17-2023, 06:50 AM 
	
	
	(05-17-2023, 04:33 AM)Mark A Becker Wrote: Hi Steve-Thanks Mark. Good suggestion. I'm leaning back to the original version, especially with you change. It seems to read better.
I’m a sucker for short poems, and like this one enough to offer one word change:
‘explode’ for ‘rising’
Might give this one more bang for the buck.
Mark

 

 
