Getting ready for the show
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(05-17-2023, 04:33 AM)Mark A Becker Wrote:  Hi Steve-
I’m a sucker for short poems, and like this one enough to offer one word change:
‘explode’ for ‘rising’

Might give this one more bang for the buck.
Mark
Thanks Mark.  Good suggestion.  I'm leaning back to the original version, especially with you change.  It seems to read better.
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Getting ready for the show - by brynmawr1 - 05-11-2023, 12:00 AM
RE: Getting ready for the show - by brynmawr1 - 05-11-2023, 02:14 AM
RE: Getting ready for the show - by Mark A Becker - 05-17-2023, 04:33 AM
RE: Getting ready for the show - by brynmawr1 - 05-17-2023, 06:50 AM
RE: Getting ready for the show - by busker - 05-17-2023, 09:01 AM
RE: Getting ready for the show - by brynmawr1 - 05-17-2023, 10:01 AM



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