Forces of Nature-Edit

[galaxitchi]

Trim the normal. Add YOU

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Dopamine is regular old stuff.

You're somebody.


Get that through your brilliant head!!!!!!

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Some scientist made the poem dopamine.

Use that trope; or not

and run,


aesthetically pleasingly

wild

 Haha, thanks!
Great advice, I think.

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tight rope army
defend between the lines, 
raid reflections-
guard your marching mirrors.

steel soldiers
breech the eastern barricade     I think you mean "breach"
divine division-                 see below
fail to fly, fall into fire
prevail in blinded battle.

Just a note to say I like your edit.  One note: "divine division"; since the poem has a lot of military imagery, some readers might interpret "division" as the term used for a military formation.  In your original, it was about duality, so "divine duality" might be better, if that's what you are meaning to say.

Thanks for the compliment and catching that! 
 Hm, I’ll have to rework it. I was hoping it would work bring both meanings to mind..too stretched, I guess.