06-12-2023, 07:57 AM
A suggestion below for your consideration. Based on the earlier exchange...
My Wristwatch
left it lying on the dresser
darkly curled face-down
silent spider waiting
for its chance to tangle me
in its scheduled and appointed
web of sticky time.
Noticed missing weight in minutes
looped it back in place
(or it caught me again).
Just a thought. Using wristwatch as a title/first line, takes the pressure off both and avoids repetition.
My Wristwatch
left it lying on the dresser
darkly curled face-down
silent spider waiting
for its chance to tangle me
in its scheduled and appointed
web of sticky time.
Noticed missing weight in minutes
looped it back in place
(or it caught me again).
Just a thought. Using wristwatch as a title/first line, takes the pressure off both and avoids repetition.