Wristwatch (edit3)

[dukealien]

Wow.  I've tried several things, and can't seem to improve on your rewrite.  Bolder images, maybe?  But without disturbing the essentials.

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Hi duke,

like the latest revision.

Might you go a bit further still?

Wristwatch

lying face-down

on the dresser

curled spider

waiting for its chance

to tangle me

in your web

of sticky time.

Missed its weight in minutes

looped it back in place

caught up again. I wonder if you still need these? I think the implication that N will be 'caught up again' is pretty strong.

Best, Knot

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