Open Field - Edit 1

[brynmawr1]

White pasture lambs
bathe in rainbow,          this is too much
lying with closed eyes     sort of want this to read....'with closed eyes lay'
in damp morning grass,
breathing fresh spring
through the nose.         also too much

They rise without finesse,
tottering towards the shepherd
with legs wide apart,
navigating the earth       really want this last line to read...'they navigate the earth'.  but can't quite make it work
with no procedure.            

Wjames,
This is very nice.  My only wish is to have it end with my proposed last line, which, I think is strong.  I just can't get it to quite work.
Either way, nice work.
bryn