07-12-2023, 09:58 PM
(07-10-2023, 04:33 AM)Wjames Wrote: White pasture lambsHello again,
lie with closed eyes
in damp morning grass,
breathing fresh spring
and budding flower.
They rise without finesse,
tottering towards the shepherd
with legs wide apart,
navigating the earth
with care for each step.
I like the edit. Not sure what you are looking for in a last line. "with uncertainty in each step" occurred to me, although "tottering" does already imply that.
I don't think every poem needs an earthshaking last line. A simple ending is not a sin.
TqB

