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[O. M. Geezersnaps]

Hi, Wjames. This idea is clever: the conditions being tough for a real human to endure, but it sure looks good on Facebook. Or TikTok. Or FlipFlop, or whatever you kids are using these days. Holiday pictures are never as happy as they seem. 

I wonder if you might re-consider your line breaks. You've buried many interesting words (burning, assaulting, threatening, sparkling). "Impale" is the exception here. The last word in a line receives special emphasis, and you could use that to your advantage. Some clever use of enjambment may be employed here since I don't detect much meter to work around. 

I do think that meter would improve the piece, however. Perhaps alternating 4-3-4-3 iambic or trochaic lines. You'd need to add a significant amount of material to make it work, but anapestic feet such as in "Twas the Night Before Christmas" would add another subtle layer, like a dysphoric take on winter wonderland. 

The winter sun
reflects white off snow,
burning the skin
on your dripping nose
without warmth, -- This is implied in the frosty scene and understood interpersonally in the next strophe. At a certain point, you need to trust your audience to pick up these things. Otherwise, you need a new audience. 
assaulting your eyes
in concert with the winds -- 'in concert with' is a bit clunky. Is winds intended to be possessive here?
howl, sparkling the icicles
coating bare tree branches
into Christmas lights
threatening to impale
the heart.

The lighting is perfect
for a photo shoot,
and everybody smiles
trying to present the image
of a beautiful day.

Thanks for sharing, all the best.