08-23-2023, 08:19 PM
(08-23-2023, 12:10 PM)Tiger the Lion Wrote: Blocked
I'm always too much me;
unshowered,
unshaved,
in threadbare boxer shorts
with my companion
beer cans and cold pizza
loyally at my side
when the muse pops in to visit.
She never says a word.
I like this one and can relate to the mood and the “too much me.”
Should it be ‘companions’ plural? Or if ‘companion’ is something/someone other than the beer cans and pizza, then serial commas would make it clearer. I went back and forth reading it both ways trying to decide which was meant.
The last line is ambiguous (in that good poetic way). It could be an actual person stopping by who is either silent with companionable acceptance or silent in judgment (there are so many types of silence). Or it could be the phantom muse of inspiration (at least my muses are all figment word-bringers) who is withholding words from the author-narrator. The title inclines me to go with the latter interpretation, but I like that the reader has options.
—Quix
The Soufflé isn’t the soufflé; the soufflé is the recipe. --Clara
