The Fabulist (edit 3)
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(03-05-2024, 06:37 AM)TranquillityBase Wrote:  Poem for Philip

The fabulist wears a mask,
laughs easily, but his eyes
tell you he’s not joking. .....like WJ, I think 'are' is better here. Only marginally. 

When the fix is in, look
beyond the tricks of his eyes
where lunacy and rhyme
lay the suicides in a row.  .... I am a bit lost with the lunacy, rhyme, and suicides. I take it that there's a reference to some teller of tales, but because I can't place him I feel like I'm not getting a bunch of inside references

Between the fabulist’s wrist
and his unspoken name  ..... did he write under an alias? hmmmmm
worlds are made and unmade
across fields of unready nerves
forming cities in your brain.  .....these last two lines are gorgeous on their own
would've enjoyed it more if I had a better idea about which Philip was being referenced here
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The Fabulist (edit 3) - by TranquillityBase - 03-05-2024, 06:37 AM
RE: Poem for Philip - by Wjames - 03-05-2024, 10:27 AM
RE: Poem for Philip - by TranquillityBase - 03-08-2024, 08:32 AM
RE: Poem for Philip - by Wjames - 03-09-2024, 03:56 PM
RE: Poem for Philip - by dukealien - 03-06-2024, 06:50 AM
RE: Poem for Philip - by busker - 03-06-2024, 05:40 PM
RE: Poem for Philip - by rowens - 03-07-2024, 12:55 AM
RE: The Fabulist (title change for Poem for Philip) - by Michaelpoet - 03-20-2024, 01:19 AM



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