The Fabulist (edit 3)

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Hi TqB,
taking my name in whatsit? Hmm.
It was meant as a thank you 

Given the title do you need to repeat 'fabulist' in L1? 
Been waiting for that one.  I don't feel it matters that much and I wouldn't think it would discourage a reader.

Also, given the poems origins this seems more a poem about Fabulists in general, rather than one in particular? What distinguishes this one from any other?
You ask hard questions.  But you know, that probably means another stanza.
 
Also, aren't verses 2 and 3 covering a lot of the same ground?
I hope not.  2=the unbelievers, 3=the believers.

 Also, the switch from 'the scarecrow/their' to 'your/you' is a bit jarring.
Since I used second person in the first stanza, I thought returning to it in the last gave the poem some symmetry.

(Not convinced by 'ragged with', what might that look like?)
a pockmarked, scarred face laughing

The Fabulist.

For the scarecrow believers
his words fill the sky.
They hang on his periods
wander the pauses in his breath

Between his supple wrist
and his unspoken name
worlds are made and unmade
burning cities in your brain.

jack-in-the-knife fables
turn in a groove of lies
where lunacy and rhyme
lay heretics in a row.

if you listen to his eyes
they tell you he's not joking.
for the fabulist wears a mask
ragged with laughter

Right now, this seems a superior rendering....I think it works until you get to the last two lines which seem flat to me...Ill have to study more why it feels better to me.
I'm beginning to suspect that you are a Borg Poet   
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OK, I studied it.  I kinda like leaving the fabulist's appearance until the end, but not enough to restructure the whole poem.  However I do really like what you did in the 4th stanza, the recombining brought out a superior stanza, so Im going to look at that more.  And maybe another stanza distinguishing this one from the dictiionary fabulist.

Fun to think about.

TqB