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09-21-2024, 07:55 PM

(09-20-2024, 02:30 PM)ambrosial revelation Wrote: Really nice poem.

Like the title change, it gives it more focus.

I prefer the inclusion of 'on a cool' in the first version. It's more evocative.

Yep. Made the change back. Think it works better, too
Thanks,
Mark

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two gloves - by Mark A Becker - 09-16-2024, 09:56 PM

RE: in memory - by brynmawr1 - 09-17-2024, 01:16 AM

RE: in memory - by Mark A Becker - 09-18-2024, 06:58 PM

RE: in memory - by Bunx - 09-17-2024, 08:24 AM

RE: two gloves - by Wjames - 09-19-2024, 11:46 PM

RE: two gloves - by Bunx - 09-20-2024, 01:43 AM

RE: two gloves - by Magpie - 09-20-2024, 02:30 PM

RE: two gloves - by Mark A Becker - 09-21-2024, 07:55 PM

RE: two gloves - by Knot - 09-20-2024, 10:52 PM

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