Flowers

[Bunx]

Some heartache, sadness, sleeplessness and an attempt to feel a loved one's grief bore this.  I haven't written poetry since grade school and wrote 5 poems this week. 
Thanks in advance for any critique or just a general reaction. Be honest, I'm not attached to this so don't worry about hurting my feelings, just wanted to see what others thought.


This winter will end
They always do

The cold evening frosts
Make way to morning dew

The endless dark days
Grow back into warm

The grey black abyss
Yields a first springs storm

Some patches of ice
May never go away

But the melting of snow
Will sprout flowers one day

Hey Dan, I write aton of cell phone poems so I know when when I see one. My first critique would be punctuation. I think of this as an all or nothing thing. Proper nouns breed "proper boring sentences". With so many similarities between symbols and themes it would be good to distinguish them. My other critique is about the theme. I'd argue your poem would stand out more if you add what the symbolism is about. Your saying the same thing in a lot of the same ways. How about this

The grey black abyss
Yields a first springs storm

Some patches of ice
May never go away

My emotions aren't black,
white, but gray

colors are allowed shades
of blue I will love anew.

A void contrast to a heart wishing 
not goodbye to a bird that flew.


Anyways some ideas you are the master of your work.

Thanks you for your feedback and read.