10-16-2024, 09:43 AM
This is the most structured poem that I have ever written. It originally emerged as 4 stanzas, each with 3 lines of 3 words
followed by a 4th line with 5 words. And that structure has not changed despite several verbal revisions which mostly
focused on one difficult line.
I realize that this poem will not be to many readers’ tastes. Its cryptic style might be confusing, and the inner struggles of
the subject with himself and with the world are challenging to convey. However, it speaks to me.
The latest version, maybe the last, is an attempt to deal with the difficulty of illustrating the subject walking through an
overwhelming internal crisis that literally takes him to the ground. And the healing and peace and truth that he finds.
Words alone, using “standard” grammar and style, proved inadequate to communicate the intensity of the experience. Through
Capitalization, italicization, and changes in punctuation, I have tried to transform this into something more experiential.
This poem doesn’t seem to belong in this forum, but I read somewhere that one definition of short form poetry is one with 60
words or less, so I posted it here. Should a moderator think it better belongs somewhere else, then feel free to move it.
followed by a 4th line with 5 words. And that structure has not changed despite several verbal revisions which mostly
focused on one difficult line.
I realize that this poem will not be to many readers’ tastes. Its cryptic style might be confusing, and the inner struggles of
the subject with himself and with the world are challenging to convey. However, it speaks to me.
The latest version, maybe the last, is an attempt to deal with the difficulty of illustrating the subject walking through an
overwhelming internal crisis that literally takes him to the ground. And the healing and peace and truth that he finds.
Words alone, using “standard” grammar and style, proved inadequate to communicate the intensity of the experience. Through
Capitalization, italicization, and changes in punctuation, I have tried to transform this into something more experiential.
This poem doesn’t seem to belong in this forum, but I read somewhere that one definition of short form poetry is one with 60
words or less, so I posted it here. Should a moderator think it better belongs somewhere else, then feel free to move it.