Kite

[Knot]

Hi Valerie,
strong title, and I like the plainness of the language. Two weak spots, for me.
'She'll see him / floating magnanimously' - feels like the register changes. Maybe begin with 'Let her watch / ... ?
'the magic words' - similar issue, maybe 'what it takes' ?
(Small niggle, is there much difference between 'insolence' and 'disrespect'?)


He hates her
the insolence
and disrespect
all the drama
(which) she brings
and he's just
pressed send
on another

another

private message
to let her know
that he won’t
stand for it.
She’ll see him
floating magnanimously
above her.

He feels certain
that this time
he finally found
the magic words ............. it seems to lack some of the directness of the earlier verses.
to control
the wind.


Best, Knot

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