10-06-2024, 02:41 PM
Thanks Busker you've given me lots of encouragement there.
I agree with you on the points you've made on that middle section. I've been messing about with structure and each line has 6 syllables so it ran as 666 666 666. It's more of a gimmick than an absolute necessity so if it is messing with the poem I'll give it a think.
I know what you mean about the last two lines also. However I don't usually like to use any lines from the poem as the title. I was also trying to go with 'kosmos' as meaning 'order' so there was a contradiction.
Lots to think about, cheers for the read.
I agree with you on the points you've made on that middle section. I've been messing about with structure and each line has 6 syllables so it ran as 666 666 666. It's more of a gimmick than an absolute necessity so if it is messing with the poem I'll give it a think.
I know what you mean about the last two lines also. However I don't usually like to use any lines from the poem as the title. I was also trying to go with 'kosmos' as meaning 'order' so there was a contradiction.
Lots to think about, cheers for the read.
wae aye man ye radgie